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Co-authored-by: Jordan Smith <[email protected]>

Author: mongoKart

source/whats-new.txt

@@ -64,16 +64,15 @@ Learn what's new in:
 What's New in 6.8
 -----------------
 
-The {+driver-short+} v6.7 release includes the following features:
+The {+driver-short+} v6.8 release includes the following features:
 
 - Fixes a bug where a local KMS provider accepted a ``BSON Binary`` instance at
   runtime, but the TypeScript compiler allowed only values of type ``Buffer`` and
   ``string``.
 
 - The ``ReadConcernMajorityNotAvailableYet`` error is now a retryable read error.
 
-- KMS providers can now be associated with a name, and multiple keys can be provided
-  for each KMS provider. This feature requires ``mongodb-client-encryption`` v6.0.1 or later.
+- You can now associate a name and provide multiple keys for KMS providers. This feature requires ``mongodb-client-encryption`` v6.0.1 or later.
   You can't use named KMS providers if your application uses the automatic
   KMS provider refresh capability.
 
@@ -110,9 +109,9 @@ The {+driver-short+} v6.7 release includes the following features:
 - The driver now decodes BSON responses as the cursor iterates over them,
   rather than decoding the entire BSON response when it is received.
 
-- The Github release for the ``mongodb`` package now contains a detached signature file for
-  the NPM package (named ``mongodb-X.Y.Z.tgz.sig``). This change applies to every major
-  and patch release for versions 5 and 6 of the driver. To verify the package signature,
+- The Github release for the ``mongodb`` package now contains a detached signature file,
+   ``mongodb-X.Y.Z.tgz.sig``, for the NPM package. This change applies to every major
+  and patch release for versions 5.x and 6.x of the driver. To verify the package signature,
   follow the instructions in the Release Integrity section of the
   `README.md <https://github.com/mongodb/node-mongodb-native/blob/v6.8.0/README.md#release-integrity>`__
   file in the driver's GitHub repository.