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Author: mcasperson

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@@ -2,15 +2,15 @@ <h1><a id="planning">Planning your Internal Developer Platform</a></h1>
 
 <p>It is tempting to think platform engineering has a simple, technical solution. Perhaps a YAML template for your
     Kubernetes cluster, a script for your CI/CD pipeline, or a custom web app providing a dashboard and internal
-    registry of templates will solve the immediate requirements. But this narrow focus misses the opportunity a platform
+    registry of templates will solve the immediate requirements. But this technical focus misses the opportunity a platform
     team can bring to your organization.</p>
 
-<p>Platform engineering means building a Developer Experience as a Service platform. A platform team is effectively
+<p>Platform engineering means building a DevEx as a Service platform. A platform team is effectively
     running an internal startup, which means you are not providing a piece of software but a complete service to your
     internal customers.</p>
 
 <p>Running an internal startup can be daunting because platform engineering teams must draw from the work typically done
-    by dedicated engineering, support, technical writing, training, product, and design teams. However, addressing a few
+    by dedicated engineering, support, technical writing, training, developer relations (DevRel), product, and design teams. However, addressing a few
     key activities early in the inception of a platform team provides a solid foundation for future growth while
     retaining the agility required to keep pace with high-performing DevOps teams.</p>
 
@@ -29,9 +29,9 @@ <h2>Building your Platform Team</h2>
     product manager; at firms in which a platform team has existed for more than three years, this number rises to
     74%.</p>
 
-<p>You can expect a successful platform engineering strategy to incorporate other specialized roles such as technical
-    support, technical writers, security, and site reliability. That said, though, generalists will serve your initial
-    platform well by being able to draw on experience from various backgrounds.</p>
+<p>You can expect a successful platform engineering strategy to work closely with, or incorporate, other specialized roles 
+    such as technicalsupport, technical writers, security, and site reliability. That said, though, generalists will serve 
+    your initial platform well by being able to draw on experience from various backgrounds.</p>
 
 <p>The Forbes article “Generalist Vs. Specialist Teams: How To Build A Highly Creative Startup” (https://oc.to/jkdl9C)
     notes that the unpredictable nature of startups does not support specialization:</p>